Here is a second draft of my revised piece. I am considering working in some more allusions to Alice and Wonderland.
Second Draft
A Monday Morning in May
How come 5:30 didn't seem so early in September?
But now it's a Monday morning in late May
And I feel weighed down by my own exhaustion,
comforted only by the cocoon of covers.
My pillow is no match for the piercing sound
Of the alarm clock as it wails, and wails, and wails
I extend an arm to reach for it, and I fumble, clumsily.
My fingers pass over the buttons as if they are reading Braille,
But I'm awkward and groggy and slow.
After stumbling, and stumbling, and stumbling,
Thankfully--finally--I hit it.
Snooze.
Fifteen minutes.
The first five feel like forever
And I can feel myself getting sucked into a dark and encompassing sleep.
Soon I'm falling like Alice down the rabbit hole.
I tumble past questions and decisions and reminders;
I'm not thinking about what to wear, what to have for lunch,
or remembering that I have to pack my highlighted copy of The Great Gatsby.
This is an exceptional state of slumber.
I am plummeting to Wonderland where I am without worry.
I'm not even thinking about whether or not the photocopier will jam this morning
Or that I need to sign out the TV for G-Block.
In this kind of sleep it's like I've never heard of an agenda,
a 7:30 parent meeting, or NEAS&C.
Before I get a chance to meet the Mad Hatter,
the sound calls from far away
And again, that alarm clock is wailing, and wailing, and wailing
And again, I reach, fumble, and finally hit it.
Snooze.
But before I can enjoy those first five minutes,
that drifting off when a thought about the day is not possible,
I feel a finger poking me gently--but with certainty--beneath my ribs.
"Are you going to get in the shower?"
Though his eyes are closed, he smiles like he's some kind of Cheshire cat.
First Draft
A Monday Morning in May
How come 5:30 didn't seem so early in September?
I'm slow to wake on a Monday morning in late May
The alarm clock wails, and wails, and wails
I extend an arm to reach for it, but I fumble, clumsily
My fingers pass over the buttons as if they are reading Braille and they do not understand
And thankfully--finally--I hit it.
Snooze.
Fifteen minutes.
The first five feel like forever
And I can feel myself getting sucked into a dark and encompassing sleep.
Soon I'm falling like Alice down the rabbit hole.
This is an exceptional state of slumber.
I'm not even thinking about whether or not the photocopier will jam this morning
Or that I need to sign out the TV for G-Block.
In this kind of sleep it's like I've never heard of an agenda,
a 7:30 parent meeting, or NEAS&C.
Before I get a chance to meet the Mad Hatter,
the sound calls from far away
And again, that alarm clock is wailing, and wailing, and wailing
And again, I reach, fumble, and finally hit it.
Snooze.
But before I can enjoy those first five minutes,
I feel a finger poking me gently--but with certainty--beneath my ribs.
"Are you going to get in the shower?"
Though his eyes are closed, he smiles like he's some kind of Cheshire cat.